Song: http://www.zshare.net/audio/14930360358a2fb4/

just lyrics to a song i wrote, looking for some feedback to see if i should vice it or not.

Intro:(riddim slowly fades in while he talks)

adams(twins of twins sample): thes men are dangerous, these men have gun that come from space. our likkle 38 and our likkle m16 is no match for the fire power that these men have. yuh undastan? ah when yuh look into the reality of this ting, is only tv i see these guns on. these men have guns that look like it fire laser beam, is wehday dem cut a jeep in two.

verse1
dis ting weh mis bust
it shine like chrome
bust all face
and pry off dome
leff all brains
fly or flown
leff all mouth
a fry or foam
di x-ray type
have a eye for bone
him a beg hime bawl
him a cry for home
-anytime di big machine bust...p*u**yy haffi crawl an die pon groun
shoulda lean wen mi
strap a big ting
betta duch wen di
copper clip swing
grenade lan wen mi
pop a quick pin
den mi gi di
mac a quick swing
bust yuh like glass weh
alota bricks fling
tear off chest muscle
alota rib skin
bun yuh like jerkin
alota pig skin
dead now worm an
maggot a eat him

chorus
Know how we operate (and such)
love mek copper bake (and such)
bare big machine wi mek hand cl**tch
mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck.
know how we operate (and such)
love leff shot ina face (and such)
copper mek skin dissipate on touch
Mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck.

verse
yuh check seh mi gun
stick like glue?
anyting ina di way
it rip right through
mi nuh love man but mi
clips like you
screw on di scope and
fit lights too
now mi tek head shots and
hip strikes too
bust jaw bone and
rip eyes too
a taste of what my
grips might do
mi nuh rocky mi nah
fist fight you
change di flow
like mi switch empty clips
500 round dis bitch empty quick
point 7 claiber highly equip
kalashnikov put yuh unda I V drip
M4 quietly beside me sit
ready fi bark at di slightest tick
mi not hiding shotgun
wen mi riding shotgun
MR RABBIT, YUH WAH RACE MY SLUG?

chprus
Know how we operate(and such)
love mek copper bake(and such)
bare big machine wi mek hand cl**tch
mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck
know how we operate(and such)
love leff shot ina face(and such)
copper mek skin dissipate on touch
mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck.


how it look?



-- Edited by MystiQ at 13:31, 2008-07-08