just lyrics to a song i wrote, looking for some feedback to see if i should vice it or not.
Intro:(riddim slowly fades in while he talks)
adams(twins of twins sample): thes men are dangerous, these men have gun that come from space. our likkle 38 and our likkle m16 is no match for the fire power that these men have. yuh undastan? ah when yuh look into the reality of this ting, is only tv i see these guns on. these men have guns that look like it fire laser beam, is wehday dem cut a jeep in two.
verse1 dis ting weh mis bust it shine like chrome bust all face and pry off dome leff all brains fly or flown leff all mouth a fry or foam di x-ray type have a eye for bone him a beg hime bawl him a cry for home -anytime di big machine bust...p*u**yy haffi crawl an die pon groun shoulda lean wen mi strap a big ting betta duch wen di copper clip swing grenade lan wen mi pop a quick pin den mi gi di mac a quick swing bust yuh like glass weh alota bricks fling tear off chest muscle alota rib skin bun yuh like jerkin alota pig skin dead now worm an maggot a eat him
chorus Know how we operate (and such) love mek copper bake (and such) bare big machine wi mek hand cl**tch mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck. know how we operate (and such) love leff shot ina face (and such) copper mek skin dissipate on touch Mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck.
verse yuh check seh mi gun stick like glue? anyting ina di way it rip right through mi nuh love man but mi clips like you screw on di scope and fit lights too now mi tek head shots and hip strikes too bust jaw bone and rip eyes too a taste of what my grips might do mi nuh rocky mi nah fist fight you change di flow like mi switch empty clips 500 round dis bitch empty quick point 7 claiber highly equip kalashnikov put yuh unda I V drip M4 quietly beside me sit ready fi bark at di slightest tick mi not hiding shotgun wen mi riding shotgun MR RABBIT, YUH WAH RACE MY SLUG?
chprus Know how we operate(and such) love mek copper bake(and such) bare big machine wi mek hand cl**tch mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck know how we operate(and such) love leff shot ina face(and such) copper mek skin dissipate on touch mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck.
how it look?
-- Edited by MystiQ at 13:31, 2008-07-08
Kareem AkA DJ FRESH said
02:30 07/08 2008
weh di song mi cant tell unless mi hear it
by the way u neva gone a u bed
Kareem AkA DJ FRESH said
02:31 07/08 2008
but dah last part mi hear it some weh before yo
MystiQ said
02:32 07/08 2008
nah sah.lol, di song a fawud soon, right now a just di lyrics, mi wi have it up by 2marrow thou.
MystiQ said
02:32 07/08 2008
which part?
Kareem AkA DJ FRESH said
02:33 07/08 2008
the and such wasnt tat ina busy song
MystiQ said
02:35 07/08 2008
wouldnt knw coz mi nuh listen to busy.lol
Kareem AkA DJ FRESH said
02:36 07/08 2008
it sound selll of thought mi don big up you self
MystiQ said
02:37 07/08 2008
bless yute, it might sound kinda f**k up wen it record though, coz anuh professional ting.lol
Kareem AkA DJ FRESH said
02:39 07/08 2008
Use acid pro when u a record if no pro done it have a noise canceling in it
MystiQ said
02:42 07/08 2008
zeen don. mi mic kinda low grade so dats di primary problem, but mi ago try mek it smooth. if anyting mi dweet ova a studio.
just lyrics to a song i wrote, looking for some feedback to see if i should vice it or not.
Intro:(riddim slowly fades in while he talks)
adams(twins of twins sample): thes men are dangerous, these men have gun that come from space. our likkle 38 and our likkle m16 is no match for the fire power that these men have. yuh undastan? ah when yuh look into the reality of this ting, is only tv i see these guns on. these men have guns that look like it fire laser beam, is wehday dem cut a jeep in two.
verse1
dis ting weh mis bust
it shine like chrome
bust all face
and pry off dome
leff all brains
fly or flown
leff all mouth
a fry or foam
di x-ray type
have a eye for bone
him a beg hime bawl
him a cry for home
-anytime di big machine bust...p*u**yy haffi crawl an die pon groun
shoulda lean wen mi
strap a big ting
betta duch wen di
copper clip swing
grenade lan wen mi
pop a quick pin
den mi gi di
mac a quick swing
bust yuh like glass weh
alota bricks fling
tear off chest muscle
alota rib skin
bun yuh like jerkin
alota pig skin
dead now worm an
maggot a eat him
chorus
Know how we operate (and such)
love mek copper bake (and such)
bare big machine wi mek hand cl**tch
mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck.
know how we operate (and such)
love leff shot ina face (and such)
copper mek skin dissipate on touch
Mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck.
verse
yuh check seh mi gun
stick like glue?
anyting ina di way
it rip right through
mi nuh love man but mi
clips like you
screw on di scope and
fit lights too
now mi tek head shots and
hip strikes too
bust jaw bone and
rip eyes too
a taste of what my
grips might do
mi nuh rocky mi nah
fist fight you
change di flow
like mi switch empty clips
500 round dis bitch empty quick
point 7 claiber highly equip
kalashnikov put yuh unda I V drip
M4 quietly beside me sit
ready fi bark at di slightest tick
mi not hiding shotgun
wen mi riding shotgun
MR RABBIT, YUH WAH RACE MY SLUG?
chprus
Know how we operate(and such)
love mek copper bake(and such)
bare big machine wi mek hand cl**tch
mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck
know how we operate(and such)
love leff shot ina face(and such)
copper mek skin dissipate on touch
mi bust it, ina yuh face one stuck.
how it look?
-- Edited by MystiQ at 13:31, 2008-07-08